Thread:HerobrineAC0318/@comment-30266474-20170610041803/@comment-25014034-20170610145911

That is a good beginning, but again, once the reader reads your story, some questions will pop into his/her mind -

1) Who are "players"? Where is this Village? Tell the reader exactly where your story is (Minecraftia, or something...)

2) Who is "Herobrine"? Who is "Entity 303"? Give them a backdrop.

3) Don't let your story progress too quickly. Sure, you could have a fight straight away but be sure to explain the context.